Attempt Two

Contemplating Paradelle

Isolated and alone, I sit in my room
Isolated and alone, I sit in my room
Who dares to approach me, contemplating poetry
Who dares to approach me, contemplating poetry
My room dares contemplating who I alone
approach poetry and to sit isolated in me

Creating a masterpiece
Creating a masterpiece
I check and recheck form
I check and recheck form
Recheck masterpiece creating
A form and I check

All is naught for my first attempt
All is naught for my first attempt
Erase last stanza, start again
Erase last stanza, start again
Start last attempt for is naught
All again erase my stanza first

I start again creating poetry for
All alone I sit and recheck first and last
Who again dares to attempt contemplating
Isolated a stanza is to form
My masterpiece check start
Erase room in naught

I was looking over my first attempt at the paradelle, Saturday and I realized my last stanza did not follow form. Oh well, I like how it came out and making a mistake just meant I was going to give this form another go. I think this one follows form, but if anyone notices anything amiss, let me know. Or just comment on what you think about this poem and/or form.

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Birthday Paradelle

Shawn posing as Wolverine

Birth True Talons

Your true birth name quiz
Your true birth name quiz
Phoenix rises from the ashes
Phoenix rises from the ashes
Birth the Phoenix – name true
From ashes your quiz rises

Snap a photo of yourself
Snap a photo of yourself
Resplendent with huge talons
Resplendent with huge talons
Photo – resplendent talons
With a snap of yourself huge


Celebrate forty-three years
Celebrate forty-three years
Wolverine come out to play
Wolverine come out to play
Out wolverine celebrate
To come years play forty-three

Scratch seven year itch
Scratch seven year itch
Fifty candles shade true self
Fifty candles shade true self
Seven candles scratch fifty
Year – shade true self itch

I took “your true birth name” quiz. No one ever gets my name right and I wanted to see what my true name is – my result: Phoenix. Okay no one has ever called me Phoenix. Then the evil twin took the quiz and got the same result. I replied, identical twins with the same name how will anyone tell us apart? And my hubby asked, Who is Jean Grey? I said, It depends on who claims to be Cyclops. My sister answered, I’d rather be with Wolverine. I said, Me too; but I already have him since my husband is only 5’6″ 😛 and to make my statement true, hubby took a picture of himself with “claws”. I love him. Since tomorrow is his 43rd birthday, I wrote him a birthday paradelle inspired by his photo. Paradelle is the poetic form challenge at Writer’s Digest til March 15th. This was too fun to pass up. Happy Birthday, Shawn!

As for the huge talons – the birthday boy knows where it’s from.