Birthday Lunes


Thirteen years ago
A baby girl was born
Happy birthday, Gretchen

Mom is powerless
To prevent years slipping by
Her baby disappears

Today we celebrate
A girl who hates birthdays
But loves Legos

Mom is dumbstruck
House has two teenage girls
It can’t be…

Oh no, thirteen!


NaPoWriMo Prompt – Today’s optional prompt is to write a lune. A lune is a sort of English-language variation on the haiku, meant to better render the tone of the Japanese haiku than the standard 5-7-5 format we all learned (and maybe loved) in elementary school. There are a couple of variants on the lune form, but just to keep things simple, let’s try the version developed by Jack Collum. His version of the lune involves a three-line stanza. The first line has three words. The second line has five, and the third line has three. You can write a poem that consists of just one stanza, or link many lune-stanzas together into a unified poem. Happy writing!

Yes, the day came. I was powerless to prevent my baby from becoming a teenager. You may notice I put 4 lunes together 3×4=12 and I left the 5th lune unfinished to make a 13 line poem. I also came up with a non birthday stanza with breakfast this morning.

Rhyme and meter
Poured into cereal bowl won’t
Fill her stomach


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